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Aug 08, 2019 15:38:41

Social re-integration | A Summer Near Westcity - v3 - 9

by @abrahamKim PATRON | 367 words | 5🔥 | 367💌

Abe

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As soon as I woke up, I checked my phone. Then when I realized that it was dead, and remembered that it'd been dead this entire time, I dashed over to the wall to plug it in. I don't know why I dashed. I could've just walked. It's amazing how quick you pick up these habits. I went a month without using this thing, and all the sudden it felt like a sin to not have it on, open to the world. Social re-integration. 

After I double checked that it was charging, I went over to the kitchen and threw the empty box of food in the trash. Then I went into the bathroom brushed my teeth and took a shower. 

When I got out, my phone had enough charge for me to turn it on. After about ten seconds of waiting to see if I had any missed texts or calls, I went and took out the trash and replaced the bin with the final fresh bag. I would need to go grocery shopping soon. I would go today. I had no plans anyhow.

Then, I vacuumed the place, changed the sheets, and organized my laundry hampers. I thought of doing a load of laundry, but when I counted my quarters I realized I was just two short. I'd get some while grocery shopping.

I stuck my wallet and keys into my pocket and went to fetch my phone which was at over 50 percent battery now. And on there was two missed calls from Jackie. 


Outside, I walked towards a Kransz Mart and gave Jackie a ring. 

"Yo. What you up to today?" he answered near immediately.

"Nothing much. Walking to Kransz Mart actually right now. You?"

"Going shopping? You got a car?"

"Nope."

"Well let me pick you up then."

"I'm already walking there."

"I'll meet you there. Then I can drop you off at your apartment. The Kranzs Mart near the highway right?"

"Yeah. You sure?"

"I need groceries too. You saw my fridge." Jackie then laughed. And I recalled what his fridge looked like and giggled.

"Okay see you soon. Thanks."


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    @abrahamKim - this part made me think of a thing I've heard people say about how to write fiction: Show me, don't tell me.

    After I double checked that it was charging, I went over to the kitchen and threw the empty box of food in the trash. Then I went into the bathroom brushed my teeth and took a shower.

    Brian Ball avatar Brian Ball | Aug 08, 2019 12:50:27
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      @brianball Lol is the above an example of showing or telling?

      to me that's showing and deliberate. but it think it could be perceived as telling.

      Abe avatar Abe | Aug 09, 2019 15:28:54
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      @abrahamKim - the lack of sensory details causes it to be telling ( me thinks )

      If you say what actually happened: telling. If the person knows because they recognize the movements, the smells, the sounds -- showing.

      Pushing the button on the phone I got 58% and a lightning bolt - check. I opened the door cabinet under the sink and carefully stacked the empty box on top of last-night's leftovers and some wet muffin wrappers. ( trash in kitchen )

      I'm just attempting here. I think this is what makes fiction crafty.

      Brian Ball avatar Brian Ball | Aug 09, 2019 07:28:01
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      @brianball

      lol I agree with you. I'm not trying to write crafty fiction actually though.

      Abe avatar Abe | Aug 09, 2019 17:16:39
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      @abrahamKim - by crafty, I just meant -- it requires attention to the craft -- not like in the Beastie Boys == "She's crafty..." sense.

      Brian Ball avatar Brian Ball | Aug 09, 2019 08:20:45
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      @brianball lol I know

      Abe avatar Abe | Aug 09, 2019 19:11:05
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