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Jul 13, 2019 07:00:06

Details & Feedback Badge

by @brianball PATRON | 254 words | 400πŸ’Œ

Brian Ball

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I just read the post by @davidneuman mentioning the Hemingway app and Grammarly. Then, I started his post on Motivation and Discipline. I'm noticing a writing pattern and want to point it out -- it's one I have used many times and explains my familiarity.

Vague generalizations.

Here are some chunks from this post:

  • I and many others
  • sheer ambition
  • constantly seek to improve
  • reading and listening to educational content
  • changing career paths.
  • everything changes
  • difficult to do things that I do not want to do
  • many such activities

Adding details takes time, words and specifics. You'll quickly jump to 200+ words if you explain how you feel when your avoiding cleaning. Is your mind racing with thoughts of success and fame? Are you imagining a new house -- that's already cleaned? How many rooms does it have? Concrete and glass?, French country?

Is your gut rumbling because you're intermittent fasting and the clock seems to be off as there are still 17 minutes until you can take a break from code and pull out your grandma's cast-iron skillet and fry up your paleo pancakes with toasted-Tahitian coconut oil and Himalayan sea salt?

Generalizations occur when we try to write quickly. Details reveal themselves when we edit and slice off the fat in favor of the tastier morsels.

Will you point out specifics you notice in my writing that could be hand-tightened? If we leave an objective comment each day, we might earn the Detailed Feedback Badge from @baz

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    @brianball this is great, Brian! It makes a lot of sense. Adding details definitely takes more thought as opposed to throwing words onto the page/screen.

    The feedback badge is a good idea as well. We’re all looking to improve by writing here daily. One concern is that that there are those that might not be open to criticism.

    David Neuman avatar David Neuman | Jul 13, 2019 17:22:20
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      @davidneuman - nobody mentioned criticism.

      Brian Ball avatar Brian Ball | Jul 13, 2019 15:16:34
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    @brianball - I like this Brian. This is a social experiment on a new level. Exactly what causes us to lose the discipline to keep going. What makes us stay and push through the boredom? Is it our body telling us to take a break? Is discipline going against our evolutionary instinct to not be exhausted? Somebody do a thesis on this already.

    Keni avatar Keni | Jul 13, 2019 11:23:08
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    @brianball Ok, even though I'm drinking Bulleproof coffee right now, paleo pancakes with toasted-Tahitian coconut oil and Himalayan sea salt (and butter, of course) sounds fantastic. I like the feedback idea.

    Brandon Wilson avatar Brandon Wilson | Jul 13, 2019 07:40:14
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      @brianball @brandonwilson - Lol - I just got hungry myself. Drinking macha latte with heavy cream. We all doing keto.

      Keni avatar Keni | Jul 13, 2019 11:20:50
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