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Jun 16, 2019 23:38:08

Crafting Dialogue

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Zainab Mirza

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Tabitha sat by the window, watching the boy and his dog play in the garden. She sighed.

“Tabitha, you know it’s never going to work out, right?” came a silky voice from behind her.

Tabitha snapped out of her reverie. She turned around and glared at the interruption that sat down beside her. Loathsome creature! What did she know about love!

“Shut up, you! He’ll hear you!”

“Pooh, that dork can’t hear anything but the sound of his own voice.”

“He’s not like that.”

“Do you know what Lucy caught him doing the other day? Staring at his reflection in the pond.”

“Such rubbish! Go on with you Eliza, I’ve no time for you.”

They heard a thundering down the stairs and turned in the direction of the door.

“Ugh, that’s Lucy looking for us. I’m not in the mood to play with that brat today.”

“Is there anyone that pleases her majesty?”

Just then the door opened and a little girl in a white frock came running through, looking around the room. She caught sight of Eliza and Tabitha on the window seat, and walked towards them.

“Lizzy, Tabby! I’ve been looking all over for you. Come on, it’s tea time!”

She gathered the cats in her arms and took them upstairs to her playroom.


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Today's in-class assignment for the short story writing workshop focused on revealing character traits through dialogue. 

I don't know how well I did considering my characters weren't human (they're supposed to be well-rounded and believable), but I had fun writing it =D 

I received mixed feedback. A couple of people enjoyed it. One person thought the dialogue flowed well but the 'twist' at the end was gimmicky and unnecessary. 

What about you? I'd love to know your thoughts if you've read this far.

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